Peer Paper #2 Review

In Response to Clifford’s Analysis

1. The opening captures the audience attention by stating the earth’s resources have been decreasing and by mentioning environmental movements we have all heard of.

2. The subject description meets what is necessary and occasionally excels past it.

3. From what I can tell the targets of the ads are the American people in general.

4. The point of the essay, which is we should all work to save the environment, is somewhat unclear in the beginning but is well defined in the conclusion

5. The evidence provided is sufficient, the analysis makes ample use of historical evidence and logical arguments.

6. The sources listed, such as “Maine Woods”, seem credible enough.

7. Other perspectives are occasionally considered

8. The tone seems to be a positive call to action, accurately conveying the stance that we should work to save the environment.

9. The analysis seems to be effectively designed, the images are clear and the body paragraphs analyze them well.

10. The analysis is organized decently but the transitions are sometimes lacking.

11. The style is appropriate

12. The conclusion is well done and fits fluidly into the analysis

13. The title states clearly what the analysis is about and the portion of the title in parenthesis, “Trendy or True?” does well to draw in readers.

Response to Joshua Rentz’s Analysis

1. There is no clear question for the analysis, although one is not necessary for its subject

2. The opening captures the audience’s attention by beginning with an anecdote. Next it defines the analysis’ stance on the environment and makes clear what it will center on.

3. The subject is described in sufficient detail.

4. The insights on the ads are stated explicitly and are well supported and completely acceptable.

5. The point of the analysis is clear, that we should attempt to conserve the environment, and is stated in the introduction.

6. The evidence provided is good. The use of historical context, statistics, and logical arguments give strong support to the essays claims.

7. URL’s and the advertisements themselves are included and seem to be credible.

8. Other perspectives are not directly stated although the analysis does seem to imply them.

9. The tone seems mostly neutral with a slight bias towards positive or a call to action. It does well to convey the stance.

10. The design of the analysis is effective although the images themselves should be moved next to the body paragraphs that analyze them.

11. The style is semi-casual. It is somewhat appropriate but it could stand to be more formal to better fit the subject.

12. The conclusion is somewhat sparse currently.

13. The title makes it clear that the analysis will revolve around a subject that will affect the future but it does not explicitly state what that subject